Experimentation
To: Lab07
From: Backer3
Initial tests of batch 208-P show promise. Proceed to stage 4.
To: Backer3
From: Lab07
Acknowledged. Resulting enzymes in 208-P have been cross-pollinated then introduced to a selection of plants... ivy, rhododendrons, gladioli and holly. Awaiting further results.
To: Lab07
From: Backer3
The administration is getting antsy - it looks like funding could be rescinded any moment. Speed it up, skip animals... go straight to human trials. Repeat, begin human trials immediately.
To: Backer3
From: HandlerCrew
Problem has been liquidated. Minimal injuries our end. A few cases of slight blistering after contact. Handler Crew standing down.
Hehe, that's a creative way to do this! Good use the words!
ReplyDeleteI like the format of the story and your use of the words was excellent. I wish the ending had a little more punch. I was waiting for something to go wrong with testing but it was just a few blisters.
ReplyDeleteThis was a clever way to structure the story, and a great use of the word prompts.
ReplyDeleteDue to lack of words (I hit the 100), I couldn't make them weeping or anything else implying something somewhere going drastically wrong.
ReplyDeleteMaybe with leaving it for longer and coming back to it, I could have trimmed it better to fit something else in.
But I'm glad you liked it nevertheless.
With short flash like this, it's all about reading between the lines. Having been instructed in the ways of corporate email, I know you have to leave out details, emotion, and personalities. But you learn to figure out what happened. In that way of thinking, it is a chilling story. Very nice.
ReplyDeleteI like the format and the premise is intriguing...how can you not like a story where the bosses tell you to skip ahead to dangerous human testing lol. I can see where the word constraint made it difficult to flesh out the repercussions but it left it vague enough that we can draw our own conclusions...what problem was liquidated? Who or what blistered? The handlers or the experimentees LOL? Leaves room for you to expand later maybe :)
ReplyDeletegreat scott! its alive!
ReplyDeletenice flash =)
I like the way you told this story. Very interesting, and left a lot to the imagination. Nice to see the seed words worked into the story so seamlessly, too.
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