"Do I see her much?"
Only every time I close my eyes. When I blink. When I stare into space. When I can't sleep. In my dreams. Out the corner of my eye. Always.
"Nah, not really. We just drifted, you know?"
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This is an entry for their Gargleblaster Challenge - it has to be 42 words on the dot, and open to the first 42 people. This week (#157), the prompt is Do you see her much?
Wow - 42 words exactly sounds challenging. I thought 100 words was tough. Well done!
ReplyDeleteAt the moment, more challenging is working out how to get their link back thing working correctly, I'm banging my head on the desk and swearing quietly to myself as HTML is a closed book to me
DeleteArgh, so sorry the badges and backlinks are giving you headaches! Feel free to ping me any time and I'll walk you through it. It will help if I set up the link-up properly, of course...
DeleteWell done. I like the dismissive line at the end :)
ReplyDeletePopping over from the YW grid
Shailaja's post
Ah our denials. Good one.
ReplyDeleteGood! So life like!
ReplyDeleteNice dialogue. And only two commas! ;)
ReplyDeleteWhat is within is quite different from what we say. Interesting perspective. :-)
ReplyDelete-HA
Well done! :)
ReplyDeleteDo you see her much?-Random Thoughts Naba
So true how our words are often lies to cover up what we're REALLY thinking, because the truth leaves us too vulnerable :)
ReplyDeleteA great 42 words.
ReplyDeleteI loved the contrast between what we say out loud against what we really think.
Don't want to admit you think about her so much. Good one.
ReplyDeleteLove this inner/outer representation - brilliant!
ReplyDeleteI love getting peeks into people's thought and how their thoughts can be so different from what they say. This was a creative way to respond to the prompt.
ReplyDeleteThis is such a real internal conversation.. very creative.
ReplyDeleteVery nice - I'm with the others: it's the casual denial that makes this really great, the contrast between the internal and the external conversation. So glad you joined us here at yeah write! Keep on gargleblasting!
ReplyDeletebrilliant
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful. Your writing and the concept both. Probably I will take this to our writing group one Friday. We are always looking for new games to play.
ReplyDeleteI know this feeling well!
ReplyDeleteYou gotta have the bravado when it comes to relationships. Nice!
ReplyDeleteAh,it still hurts and how,eh?A fabulous perspective and crisply written -enjoyed reading it :-)
ReplyDeleteIt's always what we're not saying that tells the real story, isn't it? Nicely done.
ReplyDeletethis is a great take on the prompt. Hiding, denial all wrapped in 42.
ReplyDeleteLove the duality of this.
ReplyDeleteWell done on getting in those contrasting emotions of the frantic internal dialogue and the external nonchalant one. Could see the protagonist shrug as s/he spoke and pushed away the truth.
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